Communication 
2 Comments IGCSE Coursework – Expository Writing
Is it beneficial for you people to take part in competitive boxing?
Allowing your child to step into a boxing ring and getting hit by another kid, is just stupid. I wouldn’t think many people would be wanting their child having bruises on their face. If you put a couple 5 year olds in a boxing ring not much will happen. The 5 year old with the first punch will just make the other cry.
BUT! On the other hand people like ME disagree with that. They along with me believe that young people should be allowed to compete in competitive boxing. And you can compete in competitive boxing as an amateur. So when you are an amateur boxer there are a lot of restrictions from health and safety these restrictions involve having to wear head gear. So they won’t get exstreamly or get much damage to their face. This will prevent the child getting hurt.
There are many reasons for a child to take part in competitive boxing. Children are not forced into boxing so why not just give them the choice to take part in boxing. This will not turn kids in to thugs who just cause trouble on the street, its more likely going to do the opposite. Its going to keep these kids off the street and out of trouble. So this will be a nock on affect because there will be less crime on the street.
Many young people, especially teenagers tend to build up alot of anger or stress, and then tend to do something stupid e.g. They may get into a fight or an argument or say thing they dont actually mean. So when you allow children to go boxing they can release there anger and it prevents children doing stupid things they don’t mean.
Children love to stay in side now a days and play on their consoles. They barely have a social life so boxing will allow your child to gain friends and not leave him sitting in front of the television playing on the latest gadget. This won’t just lead to your child having a healthy social life it will also lead to a your child getting fitter. As he is with his NEW friends! He will be taking part in an activity so he will become fitter and this will stop your child from getting obese. So when you take away another physical activity from children there will be an increase in child obesity because competitive boxing may be the only sport that a child may want to take part in and if they can’t do that their social and physical health will deteriorate. The government get on parents case because there child is obese so stopping children taking part in a sport is just ridicule.
As these children grow they will be confronted by violence and how will they know what to do in a situation such as this. There’s only one way and that’s learning an activity/sport such as boxing. It’s all well and good learning how to boxing as a closed skill, but competitive boxing is fairly similar to being confronted by boxing; your thrown into a situation where an open skill is involved and you don’t know what’s going to happen so you need to know how to defend your self so you don’t get hurt.
Hello Jack,
Your speech draws upon some valid arguments such as: how should young people be taught how to deal with aggression; the skill and discipline of boxing; developing passions that prevent better use of time – these are all valid, but are in need of some development.
Targets:
1) Proof-read – Look at this sentence: ‘ I wouldn’t think many people would be wanting their child having bruises on their face.’ Adjust the tine and tense so that this reads with more confidence and is more formal. Read through the rest of your speech, where else is this necessary? Look at your title, for instance.
2) Your first paragraph has the beginning of a straw man fallacy – this is to be avoided. Develop a valid a valid counter-argument that explores why boxing is not beneficial – I would recommend focussing on teens rather than five year olds.
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