Creative Writing – First Draft

 May 15th, 2015  
9:00am – 3:10pm 
I have arrived back to school greeted by the school sign saying “Wentworth Secondary School”, on a Monday morning the worst day of the week according to almost everybody. It is only because everybody goes back to school or work if the first day of school or work was a Wednesday everybody would hate Wednesdays. So really its not Monday people hate it’s the work or school that starts on that day. Just like Friday is the day most people like the most, because its when you have a few days away from school or work for a lot of people. So if work ended on a Monday then everybody would love Mondays. 
Any way the first two lessons of the week are a few of my worst Science and then History. Science was terrible we was just learning acid and alkalis it is just boring and I don’t really understand it so I hate it when the teachers moans because I have not got any questions right or even attempted to do it. But I don’t see why I should try to answer a question if I know, I’m not going to do well on. So after that I went to history that lesson wasn’t so bad because we was watching a film about dictatorships mainly focused on Adolf Hitler. 
after break we had pe all the way through till lunch normally in pe we will do a a few different sports and you can choose what to do around the hall but this week we had a football competions there was six teams of seven or eight players. my team had Me, Tom, Alfie, Brandon, Harry, Eddie and Ricky. Alfie and Harry are very good, Tom, Brandon and Ricky are quite good but Eddie isn’t good.  
Match 1: Eddie was in goal and we won 2-1 after going 1-0 down 
Match 2: I went in goal for this game and we won 1-0 we scored right at the end 
Match 3: Ricky went in goal for this game and we lost 1-0 we just couldn’t score  
Match 4: Tom went in goal this game and we was against James’ team we drew 2-2 I scored this game and the ball went through the Joes legs and in. 
Match 5: This was the last game and Alfie went in goal we won 1-0 
That was the best PE lessons I have had this term, mainly because it was football and I was in a good team. When your in a team that doesn’t do well it can be frustrating and then you start to think that the lessons are boring. But because my team was doing well I didn’t think that the lesson was a boring lesson. After that we had lunch and me and James went out to the chicken shop for lunch and then we came back for the last lesson of the day. Which was geography that was just learning about population and where in the world is the most populated. It was just a normal Geography lesson really but it interests me and I enjoy the lesson because I sit next to my mates as well, so its my favorite lesson after PE. 
3:10pm 
 After school I went home to an empty house so I got out of my school uniform and put on a pair of tracksuit bottoms and my England top. I waited for my sister Izzy to get home who arrived home ten minutes later after getting the bus behind me. we then went down to my sisters primary school to pick her up. 
3:40pm 
 It is always hard to find my sister because the teachers come out to the playground with the children and let them go after seeing the person picking them up. After getting her we went back home which was only a ten minute trip on the bus stop. When I got home I made the dinner 
for my sisters and I it was only spaghetti hoops and toast that’s all I can cook really. I can cook other things but nothing that’s to hard. After that it was about 5 o’clock and mum arrived home from work.  
6:00pm 
I then went over to the astro pitches over Warwick and meet up with James, Alfie and Antony (we call him ‘Ant’). we then played football games.


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  1. jnorth Avatar
    jnorth

    Jack,

    The ideas you have begin well:
    – you have created a believable character,
    – you have clearly established a setting.

    BUT

    You must give us some clearer hints about how the story will develop.
    Where is the conflict
    Where are the time bombs?

    Which ideas might you drop to develop others? Why?

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